The no-name dilemma!

Wednesday, March 16, 2011
This, I wrote on the 16 of January 2011. It has no name...and I have to make some adjustments to it.

Take a look and give me points of view, advice and possible corrections =)

Behold, the queen has built a fortress,
for protection during war.
Strengthened the walls with hefty stones,
and closed herself inside.
Outside the walls a tumult broke.
The multitude embraced hatred,
and total chaos reigned out there
The one threw a bomb at the other,
innocents were getting hurt
and the people suffered much
But the queen built up her walls,
to keep her and the chaos apart
Cold, hard, strong tall walls
To keep herself from harm.
But when the war has ended
and evil seized to be,
The queen still refused to come out
for the walls now became synonym
of comfort and security.
“There’s still beauty between these ruins”
said a king once to the queen
“Tumble down your walls and see.
Not everyone out here is evil,
love might find a way back in.”
“Pierce my walls and come in if you may,”
Said the queen in a cold tone
“I have found no reason
To tear down my fortress.
I do not have the need yet
To bulldoze my walls”


Daniel Says:
March 17, 2011 at 9:18 AM

Ohh dear Queen of mine.
Bring down your walls.
For my lips desperately yours wants to find...


Sy Says:
March 17, 2011 at 10:26 PM

Oh king,
my walls don't need to collapse
for your lips to find mine.
pierce them walls
and come in
my lips eagerly await
to meet yours.


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